I really enjoyed this and I'm so anxious as to where this is going.
Though beautifully written, I do have a few suggestions :)
In this line:
'She worked a dead end job at the end of town'
Using end twice within that sentence is too repititious. As a suggestion, you could say She worked a dead end job at the edge of town.
Also, I really tripped over this line:
'He watched impatiently as cities flew by one by one"
Once again, the reptition of flew by one by one breaks the flow. You could say He watched impatiently as cities flew...one by one or He watched impatiently as cities flew past one by one. Just some suggestions :)
Oh and finally, in these lines:
'She went to beauty shop for a new hair style'
'He wanted find his sea legs'
There are some typographical errors or rather some missing words. I'm sure it's just an oversight on your part, nothing major :)
As I've said, I can't wait to read the next installment.
Oh and I'm just ecstatic that you've conquered your writer's block. I knew you would.
Love ya~Holly

Excellent Excellent...One of the best ive ever read..your rhytm was great your flow was great your rhyming was great and your detal was fantastic...great job all around
5/5
ttyl sometime
PeAcE
~The Poet~

Good poem 5/5 love crazy xoxox