I thought that was really good, it flowed together very well. I dont know why it was rated a 4 when i read it

Your poem started out excellent but then it started not to rhyme.

Good. im not sure what you should write aboot. why dont you try to think of a storyish poem? that usually works for me.

Hey its myspace.com/kenyadawn

and this is a great poem too...and i got urs on my page and all...and ur nameis under it..so yea...thnx..

*Kenya Dawn*