Ohhh I really liked this poem, hun. I liked how you used this part:

i'm lieing here staring up at the wall
silently thinking
as all the tears fall
you look at me like you dont care
it seems to be that im not there

Great job, and this would make an excellent song! xoxo

Hey this is a sad poem but its also good. i really liked thhe last stanza or paragraph thing. i really like how you write its good seriosuly.