Wow great poem tim!!!

"A bloody nose and a broken arm,
Are not my only problems tonight.
It's the fact that I hurt two people,
Who weren't even ready for a fight."

^Wow! this happens all too often. Innocent people pay the price for somebody elses mistake. Life just isn't fair.

another meaningful write!

I've definately heard this story before. This poem is good and is insitful. I think you should use more metaphoric phrases in your writing to bring out your poem and make it more artistic. But over its a great poem and tells a meaningful story. read some of my poems and comment tim. Peace.
[Theo]

Unfortunately, people dont get life for this kindof stuff. I know that what you wrote about was an accident, and moist of the time it is. My friend was killed by a drunk driver and even tho he drove off and left her to die he wont even go down with manslaughter. The justice system is ridiculous in this country...sorry to rant lol, it was a good poem tho xx

Unfortunately, people dont get life for this kindof stuff. I know that what you wrote about was an accident, and moist of the time it is. My friend was killed by a drunk driver and even tho he drove off and left her to die he wont even go down with manslaughter. The justice system is ridiculous in this country...sorry to rant lol, it was a good poem tho xx

Awsome, i loved this part:

I walk away handcuffed from behind,
And glance once more at my crime.
The judge said words I didn't comprehend,
Except, "Life!"would be my time.

it somehow kind of stuck to me after i read the poem lol :)

pili

AGH! You are definitely my favorite writer on here! E-mail me sometime if you wanna talk! **5/5**

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Lolli

Wow this is strong poem. Is it true?

Ha ha just playin but i really loved this poem

That was so good. It was also sad but really good.

This was wonderful.. I think that you
are one of the most brilliant poets on
this site. You have a way of painting
a picture that even a blind man could
see. I really enjoyed reading this and
I know a lot of people could probably
relate to this.

Keep up the magnificent work. 5/5

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Letty