You've done a great job with this poem, your choice of words have helped with the telling of the story! thanks for the read! and keep it up!
luv em

Good job there are a few spelling mistakes but good job i like it keep it up

Loved your poem. It was truely unique.
Great job keep on writting.

I really do like that poem..you have a talent..take care 5/5

thanks
shannon

This is an awesome poem. i luv it. 5/5

nikki

Great poem, loadz of emotion. great choice of words.
love jess XxXxXxXxXxXx

p.s. it would be appreciated if you checked out mine =) thanx

I like the flow of the poem, I wouldn't completely agree with the last line, though.
Love, if true and selfless, leads to peace of heart and all great blessings, but one must be honest with firm determination.

BTW, good poem.

Aww.a sad and truthful poem..keep writing..a good job!!
xx
mezkenzie

Really good poem, realistic storyline which makes it interesting. Great gob 5/5

Very sweet. although some of the rhymes are a bit forced. the meaning is so lovly though

Ruby

Wow love this sorry it took so long for comment excellent job
5-5

I got a bit confused in the middle but overall i liked it xxAlly

Wow this was really good. I love how you wrote it, it was very different but in a good way. Very original. Keep it up!

sammie

"Hold out your hand,
and bring me to my feet" I just loved that line...how you can be picked up by love
There was just something haunting and magical about the whole idea in this poem, as if there was something hidden underneath, but I can't quite work out what
A great read :)

Very interesting. You've got massive talent. 5/5

I liked the way you addressed the reader as the end of the poem. This felt more like love poem to me. Very sensually written...Great stuff. You are good with titles they really draw the reader in.

This is a BRILL piece really good, you've got your own unique wriring style.
few spellin mistakes but no ones perfect i do it all the time.

thank you for the comments i reall apriceate it

gema xoxoxoxo

This was awesome! haunting and dark, just what i love!

This was awesome! haunting and dark, just what i love!