AMAZING!! SUPERB!! WONDERFUL!! Keep it up.

I thought your poem was great. That's how I think that life is. People spend so much time worrying about whats on the outside that they never really notice whats going on in the inside.

Wonderfully written...and a sad reminder that we often miss what is under our nose. If we keep our heads up we won't walk right past what we seek. Great poem!

Beautiful poem. Very heartfelt. I loved it. 5/5

Just beautiful!
so simple yet such feeling.. keep it up

So sad and so beautifully written! Awesome wrting, I love the story and the ending was incredibly heartbreaking! Great job!

Nicely doen, very sad...
sam x

*You are a winner*

This is so beautiful. I honestly think this is a lot better than the poem you submitted in my contest. Even though that one got you 3rd place. thsi one would've got you 1st.
I think some of teh lines are a couple of syllables offbeat but emotion isn't smooth. thsi is really amazing work. Rock on,
Suzie

OMG, sad sad sad, the ending really threw me off, and theres not even a chance for them to be together! Gosh I hope this isn't some sort of anecdote. I liked the 'poeticness' of this, how everything seems to flow and it makes the last stanza even more surprising cause it's so different, Awesome awesome work :)