A different poem, one of a kind. I liked your simile at the end of the poem, and the comperision throughout the whole poem. Thanks for pointing it out.

-Tainted Mikochan

Pretty good job on this one...you did well with a little symbolism...
Thanks alot for the honest comment..
I'd have to admit I wasn't sure about posting it because it didn't feel right yet but I was quite bored and had nothing better to do...

Good job on the symbolism in this poem...I haven't read a poem on here like it before...Great job

Very diffrent. i enjoyed reading. it had a certian thing about it. great write.
Emma

Dude, you seriously rule... but you already know that, right? lol keep up the brilliant work!
-xXx-

I absolutely loved this poem. powerful words and strong symbolism. can't wait for more of your stuff to come my way. great... just great.

It was short, but very good. Dark poem, for sure.