Wow..this poem is amazing. It flows nicely and has alot of emotion.I loved how you ended it. Thanks so much for commenting on my poem.
xxoo

Hmm I love this poem. Very well done. The end is very powerful by the way, it kind of overwhelmed me "this is how hell begins' Very good =) Lotsaaa love -xxx-

Omg great poem hun!!!
ive been waiting for you to put more on!!!
hope your ok and thanx for the comments!!!
love jess XxXxXxXxXxX

Great peice. fantasticly written and a brilliant ending.

however, this line "And i turn pale
" somehow doesn't seem to fit in with the overall flow of the poem, it disrupts it slightly, nothing that isn't recovered again almost instantly so it is not a major flaw but it is therre.

overall 5/5

Thanx so much for ur supportt...this poem..damn,,it was EXTRA good 4 short words

OMG YOUR REALLY REALLY GOOD at writing poetry! :):):):):):):):) u should like autograph a poem send me it.. cause one day u could be famous! Anywayz I give it 5/5

Yet another great poem... def 5/5 take care sarah.