Great poem which reads like a ballad great job.. you might want to edit this line

he grabbed he hand and jumped outside
he grabbed her hand and jumped outside

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Great poem
loved it

I think this is great keep up the good work

Wow what a read lol. I love the rhyme scheme. Instead of the rhyms always being at the end of the sentence alot are stuck in the middle. Very well done, good job!

This isnt from experience. it was just a great poem to write. i love it

I love this poem so cleverly constructed to near perfection yet so effortlessly put across
Well Done

All the Best
Sondos

I loved this poem, well written and very nicely expressed. Well done for coming 4th in my contest
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As I said when you entered this poem it was very good, to elaborate you got a ten from me and two nines from my companions good job, Its really good