Brilliant start. very good flow and images created by it. has the potential to be an amazing poem

Well Hun it is a good start, I was captured by each word and the beautiful flow you had with them all together, and at the end I was thinking, "where is the rest?" lol. I hope you are able to finish it, but either way, it is still a beautiful string of words, tied well together.

-Tainted

I like it- good imagery. 5/5~beth

I adore this piece. It was, in fact, written and presented rather well and sound. The overall diction and flow of words were terrific. As a result, on the whole, I give you my props for writing such a fantastic c

I adore this piece. It was, in fact, written and presented rather well and sound. The overall diction and flow of words were terrific. As a result, on the whole, I give you my props for writing such a fantastic unfinished draft. =]