Beautifull written and thoguht provoking..well done!:)

May Lee , very deep meaning within this piece that I don't think some people take the time to really look deep within the poem and see it .

There is a few small things I would change to make the flow better but that is just my opinion .
I see a poet in you that will be creating some very meaningful poems in the future .
Looking forward to reading more , Keep writing May Lee

LOVED IT! Your poem was so TRUTHful. It seems like this happends to everyone at one point of their lives. People miss the big picture! Oh! and, nothing against Luanne, but I wouldn't change a THING! :) This was your work of art and beauty, so it just be how you want it. Great job!
~Monique
aka
Killa Kis$~

Oh Ya! where are the rest of your poems?! If you haven't you should make more! I can tell that you have amazing potential, even though you're five years older than me lol t2ul

The imagery you evoke in this is beautiful.

In search for ourselves
theres no time to reflect
on what we've created
the clay we neglect

that sums up what most of us do with life really well.

welcome to the club, May! and thanks for your comments on my work.
look forward to see more of yours.

good luck and peace
shobhana

A great comparison, very thoughtful. I also thought the third stanza was the best, amazing job. I look forward to seeing more work from you.
~Jaime

I just wana say thank you for your comment it ment alot and i love your poem it is really different, you are talented and god bless * xxx

Thanks for the comment, loved this poem, it had a beautiful flow and choice of words. Keep Writing :)

~Christina

Your poem is very deep, it gets to the point and I don't mean a Ball point pen. lol that was probably lame. anyways It was very Beautiful! 5/5