Comments : Surprise Visitor

  • 18 years ago

    by Nearly but not quite

    That was so cool, twisted in every sense of the word, wicked one!
    Helen

  • 18 years ago

    by Lu

    Bill ,
    I absolutely love this poem ....
    So many twists and turns
    Scary then passionate then deathly ..
    Couldn't wait to get to the end to see what happened .

    Hope I'm seeing it the right way ....

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    A master of twists and turns ... shocking ending! Great job :)

  • 18 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    This was totally one of the best dark/suspence poem i have read!! your a master ;)

  • 18 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    There's me thinking you were going with the love poems... However, this is one is just simply masterful!! You've created a superior dark poem... Those twists (As everyone has already pointed out)... Well lost for words... A magnificent write :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa

    The twists on this poem is amazing, one after another! Awesome stuff, I love the story, the flow, the rhyme scheme, well actually everything! Incredible poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Sara

    Awesome, you are def. one of my new fav. poets on this site.. just amazing.. wish I could write half as well as you..leave me a comment sometime, take care, Sara

  • 18 years ago

    by Sara

    Thanks for the advice , ill def take it.. sincerely sara

  • 18 years ago

    by Lindsy

    Hey i think your poem is great. you are really good.

  • 18 years ago

    by Gary

    Man thats wicked messed up. You are quite the twisted mind.

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa

    Bill, "No Longer Alone" is so beautiful and heartfelt!

    Fear raced through me, chasing me away
    Forgetting to sway in life's little breeze
    ^^^ I love these lines! So sweetly written and what a proposal at the end. So much love in your words..

  • 18 years ago

    by pvbeth

    That was so good!
    i loved it!
    at the end my jaw dropped.
    awesome ending, i never saw it coming!
    well done!

  • 18 years ago

    by Caty

    My heart was reeally racing. That was exciting. Can't wait to read more of your poems.

  • 18 years ago

    by hayley

    Hey that was really good Bill. you write really good poems. excellent. please check out some of my poems.

    lots of love
    hayley

  • 18 years ago

    by Melissa

    Bill,
    "Two Hearts Become One" simply beautiful. So sweet and heartfelt and I LOVE the ending, just perfect! Great job and it's certainly nice to see you writing all these beautiful love poems lately! ;o)

  • 18 years ago

    by LonelyNightsHurt

    WHOA~ amazing...i loved it..th words wnt togthr awesome...keep it up