Comments : The Shot

  • 14 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Remarkable write Kaitlin, I can't even find words to describe it!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very touching and clear-written poem. The flow seems a bit awkward, you could separate one line into two lines

    Keep it up

  • 14 years ago

    by Gracie Jo

    Great poem, Kaitlin. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "That look upon her face was unmistakeable." mistakable is a difficult word to spell, I had to go look it up. There is no 'e' in the middle.

    "It's the one that replays in his mind as he lie awake at night.-" Okay so the difference between 'lays' and 'lies' confuses me, but I know you should be using the singular version of the verb, so 'lie' should be replaced with 'lays' i think, or maybe 'lies'... meh

    I liked your poem. Although it lacked a certain lyrical quality I usually enjoy, it concerned extremely interesting and painful emotions, and did a good job explaining them. It was both a good storytelling poem and a sort of philosophical statement about the nature of loving and hurting.