Hmm.. the flow was a bit off in this one. But it didn't really take away from the poem as much. Very dark and haunting. Good stuff.

Originality Rules. V. Cool.

{Also, your quotes are awesome}

;)

Lv A, x

Wow you made me feel so bad for her. this is a good poem, it kept my attention the whole way through. however i would like it better if you had split it up instead of it all being thrown together in one paragraph...
good job with this

~Sandra