This could be one blazing head banger if put to blairing guitar solo's and blasting double bass beats. it's so long though..... couldnt you ever be satisfied with just a five stanza poem for once? jesus!
so.... i'll give you a 4.5 because of the exessive longness, but since there is no 4.5 option they give us, i'll give you a five in thier terms but a 4.5 in my heart.
and p.s. i want to see you write about some kind of love you have in you, i know it's in there, your not cold through and through. maybe even a want or a desire you have. that would be a very special thing to read. you know, i wont consider you any weaker for writing on those subjects of less abrasive terms, i would hold you, infact, in a place of respect in my view.
so write on truth, and write for the sake of what you want, and what you have already..... desire's and love!
peace,
phil.