Great poem
Written with great emotion. I think the poem could be set up alittle more better because it cuts off the flow of it.
Im not saying to change you poem but I have changed the setup of it and maybe you can take in a few things that I have done..

At school I am normal
I am loved as well
When I get home it's my natural hell

In the bathroom,
the door is closed
I hate what the girl in the mirror shows

The extra baggage the cushion the fat
Everything in my life seems
to revolve around that

I look at this girl and all that I see
Is the obese, dumb, ugly part of me
I see my curves my rolls my extra skin

Everyone cares about the body Im in
Not my personality nor
my thoughts, or my fears

Whenever I think about it, it brings me to tears

I hold over my head,
this fake innocent smile
If you read me right you might see my denial

But shhh,keep quiet no one can know
we must not allow
my true feelings to show

I hide it away like its a bad dream
The girl in this mirror
wont cease to scream

Stand there and watch
Watch her rip out her hair
show me the truth, what i wish
wasnt there

I hope that helps. I dont mean to change it but I think it would help alot if you divided the poem up more.

Your a great writier though it got my attention and made me want to read it!
~Julie~

Hey....i just wanted to say that i love your poem. i was reading it...and i thought..thats me. always puttin on a smile. I was wonderin if you would let me use your poem, and post it in my live journal, i promise to give u all credits and copywrights.

Hey i like ur poem alot cuase thats how i feel when i look at my self ... buh i love ur poem!!

This poem took my breath away, honestly. you have pure talent. And if this poem is written from your own personal life, then my heart goes out to you. every girl looks at themselves and sees all the flaws. Its natural, but you must undertsnad that if YOU think your beautiful, then You are beautiful! great poem. I want to read more

I f*(k!n love that that is sooo like me I swear by it