Comments : I love you x x x

  • 18 years ago

    by nadsyy

    Awww sweet...love dia mwaz xoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I know exactly how it feels when it seems like somebody has lost interest and stopped caring about us. We just have to move on and stay strong. great poem 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    Very wel done dear...5/5

    God bless u

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Happiest with me two
    ^ that should be too.

    And,

    But no matter what i seem to do
    You never seem to come through
    When i really need you
    You just seem to act like you just don't care and just stand there and stair.

    It goes from short, to extremely long.
    So it should be more like..

    No matter what I seem to do,
    You never really come through.
    When I need you, it seems as if you don't care.
    You just stand there as if you don't care.

    That's still short/short/med./med.
    But, it's better.

    And, the last stanza was good. :]
    I liked it a lot.

    I just figured it'd help out a little. :]

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Crapola.

    You just stand there and stair.

    :|
    Sorry, I've commented so much.
    It all just blends together now.
    :|
    That is for the stanza I thought needed a little work.

    Oh, and I'm not doing it to hurt your feelings, so many people take it that way.
    You're an amazing poet, if you weren't I wouldn't comment, nor would I try to tell you how I think you should improve.

    Keep up the good work, babe.