Hey good job hun. I like it keep it up

Wow i can relate! keep it up

Oh wow. that was excellent. It flowed very nicely. Thanks for your comment! Keep it up. xxx

Hey.. this is amazing.. gr8 job.. im outta words, reli.. enjoyed this so much.. ur reli talented..
keep going
take care
NannO

Blew me away. It was really compelling and yet deeply saddening as each revelation was made in the poem.
Outstanding probably one of the best of yours I have read today...keep writing....

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Yesh! I liked this one alot. I loved how you said "BAM" That was good! Different, But good. It also had a good twist to it aswell. Which made me like it alot more. Great job on this one. Keep it up 5/5

`taleee xx

Wow! very good, keep up the excellent work! i kind of feel like its missing an ending stanza or something.. but thats just me.. hehe! keep writing!
jessy

That was a great poem...I loved the twist in it....everything went together well....Nice job...
Emma 5/5

Wow- narrative poetry is always a good read, but i loved the poem it was real and on a human level

Narative but on a level that the poem doesn't feel forced and more realistic. The final line was your strongest and leaves more of an impact than the rest. The thunder and storm added such an effect to it as well as the BAM of realization hitting as thunder does.

You have a great way of writing about such feelings, keep it up, hope to see more of this

Great Job!! You had my attention!! Fantastic!! 5/5

*Speachless*

Serious..I am..That was just WOW.. It has a punch to it. I loved it.

That is really good..very sad and it was very descriptive and It's something that I'm sure many others can relate to. You did a great job on this.. the flow and rhythm of it held up well. Great job!

That was good, i liked it and it was well written
keep writing
xxxx