Woah
awesomeness
fantabastically rockin
5/5

O0o good one!

Wow this is really good! thanks for the comment on my poem....i am thinking about adding on...but i wanted to get that section out so thanks for the comment!!
Much love
Amanda

Wow, ok, two things,... do u know that its spelt "pour" or was that intentional. and two, are you saying a vaccume was used to suck out the blood???? anyways, nice work. keep it up!

Wow i thought the last two lines were such a great impact on it...it flowed nicely and it was just great 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Wow!! I agree with meaghen those last two lines had a major impact!! Flows nicely!!! 5/5 Keep up the good work!!

Gr8 poem! loved it, congrats on gettin 5th in my contest, i really liked ur poem. 5/5 on this!
~*Who Cares?*~

Very well written peice, the content is well portrayed and the structure good. smooth flow and good word choice thoughout.

5/5

Brillant!

Your really great at making the poem flow! good job!!
XoOx molly

Good job, just one thing, what do you mean by "voom"?

I realll liked this poem, it was the perfect one to put in the contest!

Hey, great poem, great rhyming, although the flow was abit cracked halfway through. 5/5
Love

I really liked this althoguh i was shoscked by detail lol but thats what i like in poetry detail because that is poetry loved it xxx alex xxx (6)

Dude, I love your poems! I'm definitally adding you to my favorites ;)

Problems:
She grabbes a towel and puts it over the voom,
grabbes should be grabs*

Your rhyming is great! Everything flowed so smoothly.
Again I can't choose which and my favorite lines!

Amazing Job!
5/5

This is the best poem i've read in a while, i really love it!! it's my favorite one of urs so far... i almost started crying while reading this, i can really relate to it, which is kinda scary... but ohwell. great job with this! 5/5!!

Forever*Yours

Cool, great poem with superb atmosphere and even better wording. I like the ending very much, well done.

"She sits and thinks about the meaning of life,
She can't even feel her wrist touching the knife.
"Just a little blood" she thinks in her mind,
As the blood poars, pain and tears are combined."

I loved the deep, dreary imagery you convey in this stanza. The emotion feels of intense numbness.

""This pain is better than any other pain",
she says to herself when it shoots through every vein."

I can almost feel the pain realisticly, the feel of the pain rushing and coursing through my veins. Nice.

"A wet and shiny tear falls down her cheek,
As everything goes black, some words she tries to speak."

This stanza is very sad and vivid. I can sense her end.

"She forces the words forward as her final last breath,
"Just a little blood" she says, "will lead to my death""

Exceptional, appropriate ending. I love how you started off with almost the same line in the first stanza and ended it with her own death.

overall, brilliant write. 5/5 :)