I think it was a very good poem i mean your right how can gurs sell there body like that i mean please it is very gross and not only that but you see them and it is like uuurrrggg

Theres no way to put this, tho write something so beautiful with so little experience to be touch just by seeing someone elses pain. 5/5.

I really liked this poem!! great job!! rate and comment my poems too...

Hey Hunnie,I love your poem,.the ending is great.5/5

And now she just wants to die
Knowing that what she do is wrong
A car stops, pulling herself together
She tries to smile and to seem strong

. . . the ending was my favorite part. it was good and I don't feel like you should anything else to it. After I read it, I felt like I wanted to read more, but at the same time it made me think of what would of really happened you know? And thats good, because I love writers that keep me wanting to read more, this poem was very sad, i haven't read a poem on prostitution yet, so this was my first one, i am going to have to say that it the flow on some of the lines coould be better, some of them didn't, but over all, it was a great poem and I gave you a 5.

That is really good. Considering you havnt been in that situation yourself, You did a great job writing about it. 5/5 It was brillant!

luv natalie x-x

HaHaha no, i LOVE when u write discussions w/ urself(lol)
thanx for the comments xox
ps...I LOVE THIS R+J PLAY!!! sooooo good!!!!

So good and touching..........I know, I wish I could tell them all something to get then to stop or IDK.....just something..it's so sad.......I love it..keep writing I'll read the other one's you wanted me to......sorry it took me a while to look at them.
xoxo
Cassie

Very good, the message was good, they do live a sad life filled with danger. The rhyming was good, I saw only one mistake "do is wrong" do should be 'does'

Wow, thats so sad. It's a shame that some girls actually do that. Great way to let it all out though. You did a great job... and your ending was perfect. 5/5

~ Tina

Wow, they r about my age, I might commit suicide if I was them, so sorry 4 them...life is always unfair...y do these hev 2 happen...:(

I thoguht the ending was great - Her trying to stand strong, and having to hide behind a facade of smiles and strength.

He dumps her some where

Somewhere is one word - no need for the space.

Peace. [Sole]

"She lets him touch her body
But he can't get to her soul
And though it's been broken
her heart still seems to be whole"

This is so sad is frustrating but this fantastic gift of writing has not only clearly generated a great deal of interest but awareness and you have certainly touched with your words and I am sure many others...sensational...

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Wow. You have so much passion. And its true sometimes you wonder what the heck is going on in this world when things like that happen.. its really crazy. I love how in this poem you tell a story in it too because this reality for some girls is becomming too real. Very emotional and powerful message. Amazing job

--emotionless.19*

Damn, thats really good