Comments : I'm missing you

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I am speachless. The emotion expressed in thiese simple metaphors flow beautifully

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I thought the metaphors and words were a good choice but the first paragraph didn't seem to flow with the rest of them to me.

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    The best and most poetic and my favorite part is the start.
    You seem like a really great poet.& that part was beautifully
    Written too:
    “kept locked behind my
    tightly closed crying eyes”
    with those things you said, one can understand your
    feelings better when at the end you wrote “I miss you”.
    So, I really liked the way you wrote this one. Keep it up.
    Much love,
    Marjan

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    I think I know just how you feel . . .Nice poetry :)

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Ann Stareyes

    You can feel the pain and the longing for that one you so miss.....truly heartfelt, so sad, but beautifully written.

    love Ann

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aww, This is really good. Fav lines:
    "J...My heart is longing, My heart is blue.
    My heart is pining, I am missing you"
    Very good poem, I loved it. And thanx heaps for the comment =]

    luv natalie x-x