Really nice. I like it. 5/5 Thanks for the comment on mine too.

Chelseyy

Yay Jon, haha. nice poem deary:) hmm.. well i cant seem to choose a fav. line. oh well.. well i liked this. I love ur style, you dont have a set number of lines for a stanza, ahah. its different:)

And here we have Jons first peom * says jenns tour guide of The bowls first poems*

Jon save me lol I've read wayyy too many poems, my comments are turing to mush! lol

Aww how cute a luffle poem! I find the first stanza completely adorable, sad, but adorable. and I love the progression you've made since this was written. its a wonderful poem and I can tell its written for a very special girl in your world. =)

Jenn

You rhyme really well, something i often have trouble with xx

Eek, I loved this one also. I can't find a single flaw worth fixing. I have yet to criticize on any work I've read of yours. Your talent is pretty remarkable. Never stop writing. 5/5