Hmmm
louisa is not sure if the 'and died' is needed
its such a good poem though i still love it

One word: Deep.
Word's cannot even begin to praise this one...they would only scratch the surface.... Thanks for taking me down...

[lostlaureate- come find me]
p.s "The mental bulllying she takes in every day"

Slipped on the L's a bit....but it rocks...

The last stanza was the perfect ending to yet another one of your perfect poems!

Aww, that is sad. It shook me a bit, made me see something deep, well done
xxxx

I like this poem alot. I like this stanza:

The ignorance and naivity
That no-one else can seem to see
The things she has endured
And still, she is ignored

I hope this poem isn't even part way true. I don't like when people feel this way or are being treated that way. I hate it! This poem has an excellent structure and a really good flow. Good job.

Wow this poem was extremely deep and full of so many emotions. Such a sad feeling to be alone, ignored, ect. ect. Nobody caring for you.. that kind of thing. I love this poem because of all the emotions that shined through so perfectly and clearly. Very well written. This was one of those writes that I think a bunch of people could relate to. Well done. 5/5 [:

I felt that this poem painted a picture of a very naive girl, one who is trapped in a world of loneliness that she can't find an escape from.

"No-one can possibly understand what she feels within..."

^^ This is such a cliched feeling that many of us feel. Whenever we're in a state of depression, we always feel like it's only ourselves that's enduring the pain, nobody else.

"The sense of not belonging
Which will never go away..."

^^ This is a common thought which we have as well: that our pain will never cease. We ache from it all the time, thinking it will kill us, not knowing that we have the ability to get stronger and overcome the pain eventually.

A very saddening poem, but I enjoyed the read.

Wow. This poem is very deep. I loved the emotion in the piece. It flowed very well, too. Although, I do not think you need a hyphen between "no" and "one". Other than that, it was perfect. 5/5

``Briana