Erm...wow...I'm sure if I'm used to your style but its interesting....some powerful phrases...but feel as if I'd only scratched the surface of it...it somewhat lacked depth?
Maybe its just my opinion....

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Hmmm... saw you were from nz so i thought id check you out... your writing is powerful with a great ending... yet i feel it was a bit weak in verse 3
take care hun
xXx-court-xXx

I hope that poetry is an outlet that is helping you deal with your pain. Strong start...lost its fire towards the end.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I hope that poetry is an outlet that is helping you deal with your pain. Strong start...lost its fire towards the end.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I love that poem..it's deep and it's exactly how i feel..love it
manda