The last line doesn't fit! Omg it's bugging me because the poem/song is awesome but does rely and have that great rythm throughout it...shame to drop it on the last line?Anyway..nice poem;)
xoxox

OH I WANT YOU TOO ANDY.
Don't miss me DEAR.
There's not much to misss ;x
My pole, feels violated :]x

&You know. If you miss me.
You should get on chat more often :[x

Touching. i reeeeeeeaaally wanna hear the song! if you have the notes to it or something on your computer could you e-mail em' to me maybe? red_hot_680@hotmail.com

I like this a lot. You don't see many poems on PaQ..mainly because it's a poem site..but whatever.

Maybe you changed the last line because it seems to fit perfectly to me.

Great job, I don't know if I found out more than what was intended, but this line "
Sunlit skies apon darkened eyes,
Somehow defeats the object..."

Seems to have the most meaning in the whole poem.