True love from the first moment

It needs tightening up...add some structure..colourful language...show your emotions in a more interesting way....what makes this love poem a million times better than the others on this site? Just somethings to think about but it was a generally well written poem....I know you can do better though...

I lvoe the sincerity in this poem..the wya it flowed and was as if you were speakign directly to her..way to share ur feleigns nad yess i think notoriosu is in big smalls ong..please read more if u can.thnxs and i WILL do the same.

lissa

This is really sweet its simple but the i can tell you really meant it so well done :d xx ALLY xx

I kno i should fix those simple things, but you can understand it. if its the difference between well and well(we'll) ill obviously put in the punctuation...but yeah. thanks for the tips and stuff. ill remember them the next time i go to post something

Maybe you should fix the somple things like youre to you're and so forth. Also the lines didn't exactly sound like they stood out which should be important. You want people to remember your poems right :) But it was really good and heartfelt.