Jon,

Your style is very...I don't have a word to describe it. but I like it. Keep it up, something that shook me and I love you for writing it is:

And this knife your savior;
Taints you skin.
This life, this labor;
Won't let you win.

All to often do teens give into thier temptations. I'd like to us this as my next brag day if you dont mind for the club, =) Well done

Jenn

Great poem, it shows alot of emotion!

5/5

This has a lot of meaning. really good.i gave you a 4.please read mine.and comment. thanks

Oooh very different from some of the other stuff I've read. I think I found the last stanza a little disappointing but perhaps thats just me. Touching all the same.
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And I agree about the whole communicating this way..

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Hey jon!
hmm.. i like it! brilliant, and i agree with jenn... I love ur style, haha. and i can see u like to use lists in ur poetry, haha.

Monique

Hi there Jon,
Wow.. That's about all i can say. I am in love with your poems lol. They are over-flowing with emotion. I can relate to this one a lot in my life in my feelings. I am looking forward to more of your poetry and song lyrics.
-Abbs

Hehe...I see you made an addition and a beautiful one at that....

I would score this a 6/5 but its not possible...keep writing...

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I have msn/myspace which were working the last time I checked...so if you want to talk or w/e....

[lostlaureate - come find]

Wow. What a wonderful poem.

Great use of words, wonderful flow, beautifully written.

And so sweet =*( Very well done

Loved it a lot!
Keep up the good work

Lotsaaaaaaa love
-xxx-

Yeh..great poem jon!
i love the way you expressed how you felt without being too harsh on the person, because obviously you care about them. Yet you show the frustration very well.
Love it!
xoxoxo

Yeh..great poem jon!
i love the way you expressed how you felt without being too harsh on the person, because obviously you care about them. Yet you show the frustration very well.
Love it!
xoxoxo

I love your style. It is very unique and not like many poems i've read, that makes your poems very special and fun to read. This poem sent a strong message out to a few people im sure, even to myself. Keep it up! 5/5

Well you just made it to my favorites list!! this poem says so much. it's beautiful in every way!!