Very good. Everything went together so well, I'm very impressed 5/5

Again, Wow. Your poems are pretty damn good. I liked this one the most. You worded it amazingly. Loved it. Keep up the awesome work! You're a talented writer!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Great job! 5/5 Keep up the good work!

-Stephanie-

This was a good poem.

"My souls aching and weak."
[My soul's aching and weak]
Unless you were saying you have more than one soul.

I really liked the last line, it wraps up the poem well. Good stuff.

Great metaphors and vocabulary. The ocean reference was great, and this poem holds a lot of the things that makes poetry what it is. The poem was short, and I was glad that it was. It was concise and didn't repeat its message. Excellent work.

Amazing choice of words and they fit together perfectly =) the only thing that could be better was the lengthn you're a good poet so use it and make longer poems =)
still deserves a 5/5 =)

~StefQ

Love your choice of words and rhythmn and rhyme to express this dark depression
well written

Wow i never read a poem so short that was so good. Amazing.

Impressive write. Written simply with good use of diction to convay the message powerfully.
First line of the second stanza, it should be "there's."
On the very last line remember to capitalise I to keep it gramatically correct. A well crafted piece, thanks for sharing.

Awesome poem. Loved the words you used. Seemed more like a 'mature' poem than 'teenage poetry'. Well described scene.

Your "theres" in this should be "there's".

It was a very sad poem with excellent vocab. I'm amazed with this poem. It was very well written. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Behind this smile theres an ocean
Desolate and bleak
Murky waters stain my pride
My soul's aching and weak.

I loved these lines the imagery was so rich. I guess at some point everyone hides behind a mask and you expressed the sadness that comes with constantly pretendig well.

It's very short but it's straight to the point. Great choice of wording. Well done 5/5

~ Tina