Comments : Silence(Rictameter)

  • 18 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    This is a great write... Though I would consider changing line 6 by swapping our "in silence" with something different. Perhaps something like:

    "But no, I sit patiently and"

    Just a thought. I really enjoyed the poem though, it has a magnificent feel to it and I can almost feel the burning sensation of those eyes. Incredible.

  • 18 years ago

    by Laura

    Cute Poem! Very nice read.

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    I love it. its very good.