Awesome rhyming scheme
Keep it cool and keep it up

-Janean

WOW
this is an extraordinary peice and i loved it. i like your style and rhyme scheme as well as your basic structure it flows well and conveys a message unlike alot of poems. you should deffinitely leave this one as is its quite good in my opinion

I like the idea of 'south of nowhere' and 'north of somewhere' its a good contrast, but i agree this poem could do with a bit of work.