I think you should beak it up every now and then to imrpove the structure. The organization as far as ideas were really good. The concept is great and the imagery vivid. But I think breaking it up could improve the flow

I agree with Kaylee. I loved the poem. it has great imagery, but needs work on the stucture, and I think by breaking it up like Kaylee said will help. Besides that wonderful Poem.

~Joe~

Wow great explanation

I already knew what love meant but you made me see it in a whole different way....love it!

The content was superb, indeed, this is the first coherant prose poem I've seen on this subject.

However, I'm in complete agreement with the first two critics...work on the structure would do justice to the poem. It deserves more than a 4.0 average.

Im sure iv commented on this before...i remember sayin something like 'a good comparison that is expressed very well'... how odd. neway its a great poem, really enjoyed it. xx

Yes this is a great explanation and portrayal of it.
I rarely write without rhyme, but this didnt need a rhyme, i thought it was superb.

I once wrote of bridges between people, but this is soo much more, im glad to have read this, it is a great write!!!

Jon

I am amazed that this isn't on 5!! This blew me away!! (It may be because some people are picky on non-rhyming poems)
BUt this was excellent, it jsut captured the trith and ... WOW

Great explanation

Fantastic use of imagery. Executed very well. Overall, nice piece.
As always~ Kate

Love it

Love it!!!

I loved it. It descirbes love entirely...5/5

Wow u are such a great poet this is awesome keep up the good work 5/5

Some sentences needed works.
A whole is not bad, might be improved even better if you think in deeper. A good writer needs at least one or twice revise upon the whole piece of work and correct somewhere if necessary.Good job.

Awh...I know it's not supposed to be sad.. but I feel like crying.. It's a great poem no fears, just reminds me of my boyfriend and I.