It's actually really good. I liked this one, the song was powerful and I bet when sung it has an even greater effect on listeners. Keep up your good work.

"I left a message for you,
and the tool i wrote it with,is now buried in the mud
All the things i thought you put me through,
Are the reason I'm lying in my own blood"

those are definately my favorite lines... i liked this.... you kept my attention the whole way through and i just wanted it to keep going on forever... just like some very great songs ive heard... i would love to hear this being sung... its utterly amazing and im adding you to my favorites -Jen- 5/5