I enjoyed reading this. I liked the diction, the flow and imagery but most importantly, the message. The hurt and damage lies can cause is incomprehensible at times, especially when the truth behind them is so simple. Great job. Take care. XxX

Excellent Excellent Excellent POem
My Only lil suggestion thing
Me just bein Nit Picky..
Dwell and hell..it was a lil over used
But the poem
and message was Great
Awesome Job
5/5
~TPOMH~

A)Title. Perfect way to hook a reader.
B)Concept. I think I got it.
C)Emotional element. Some pride I think.
D)Overall. minimize the dwell and hell if you can. If used to much the effect is ruined. Try and clear some of your lines and maybe add detail. I know it's a collab so two different styles. It was pulled off well, though.
4.6/5

Nice words and nice flow...
keep it up!

Good ryhme yet perfect penned...."truth is not always popular, but it is always right."

have a good day.

Love & peace

bert

It was really good. i like the ryme pattern that it has. good job! :D 5/5!!

Very nice collab you two!

Best of luck dear...

Another great poem, while reading it, it definately painted a picture in my mind. Good stuff.

-Jason

I think this is my favourite one of yours that I have read, I felt that the rhyme scheme worked really well and that the rhythm flowed much more smoothly than some of your other writes. I loved the imagery you used...it really helped me to visualise the poem's meaning..good job!
much love x