It was sweet and all but the need you in a line was kind of okay. Otherwise, it was a good attempt at a love poem. It was short, to the point, but could have gone more into detail about the person and how you feel.

Great for your first love poem, flows well and is very sweet. A brilliant read, keep writing these :D 5/5 x

Full of passion and longing it was a great write!

Really loved this one as well, it might well be your first love poem but it was certainly a great effort! The rhyme worked really well and helped greatly to keep it flowing "Flawless face
Angelic grace
Why can't you see me
In this small and lonely place" A really great expression of unrequited love. Super write, 5/5 x

Really loved this one as well, it might well be your first love poem but it was certainly a great effort! The rhyme worked really well and helped greatly to keep it flowing "Flawless face
Angelic grace
Why can't you see me
In this small and lonely place" A really great expression of unrequited love. Super write, 5/5 x

This is quite good, but you know, first time love poem aren't always the greatest. Mine was awful, but yours are way better.
Love,
Line

This is quite good, but you know, first time love poem aren't always the greatest. Mine was awful, but yours are way better.
Love,
Line

This is quite good, but you know, first time love poem aren't always the greatest. Mine was awful, but yours are way better.
Love,
Line

This is really good. I can definitely relate to it. Great job! 5/5**

Very cute poem..and for a first love poem..its really good.:)..but the last stanza had a different rhyme scheme from the rest of the poem.Good job anyway

Excellent poem! Very nice for a first time! I think we all start with love poems...........

I liek it, its cute.. and the rhytem is really great until the last stanza is a little iffy... but i like it great job.. and thanks for the comment on my poem

I liek it, its cute.. and the rhytem is really great until the last stanza is a little iffy... but i like it great job.. and thanks for the comment on my poem

Aly dude,
you have the talent for poetry.

I really, really like this one. It's such a cute poem and really sweet. Great job.

I think this is another great poem by you, you are one of those talented writers who i fail to read before and i do regrat it,
this poem shows such a great emotion, great job. another 5/5 from me.

Very lovely poem!
Keep up the great work.
You're a good writer!
God Bless 5/5
please check out I'm Good Enough.
Thank you very much for the comment just rate and comment that poem and I'll do another one of yours.
God Bless 5/5

~*Tay*~

Aww. i thought this was really sweet. you did really good! well done huni

much love and many kisses,
bex

I need you to love me
The way that I love you
I need you to hold me
And give me the happiness I never knew

awwwwwwwwwww. what a gr8 style of writing in few stanzas you have shoed what is the love. you realy know its meaning and you know what is love? i think it relates to me... gr8 wrk take care. thx for comments they mean lot to me. i have added u in my favourite list 5/5!!!

I love this poem!
Your feelings where beautifully expressed
And the flow was flawless,
I feel this way right now too :(
5/5