This was a pretty good poem to me, it didn't make me go WOW, but it was definately good. I am a harsh judge, so sorry if I sound too mean. I define really great poetry as poems that are strong enough to change my emotional state and make me feel something else, and I often reserve my 5 for those poems. The first part of the poem with the use of slice and gouge was done well.

-Tainted Mikochan