Comments : Hit the floor

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was good. Short but good. I liked it. There is a error in it though. But it's just a site error. It's a sad poem though. Has alot of emotion in it. But I really liked it 5/5

    `natalie x-x

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Another one im sure iv read before, great rhyming scheme and some well expressed thoughts xx

  • 18 years ago

    by ~`~Heart Full Of Tears~`~

    I like it alot

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Deep. Very nicely written - the flow was excellent, and the rhyming was great.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Wow! That was short, but deep and full of emotion. I loved it, and I love all of your poems, basically, with every one I have read so far I found no imperfections. Keep writing! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    I love this poem.. its reli sad tho, but thats where its beauty lies.. ur rhymed it well, and ur flow wasnt so bad.. better yet, ur words wer powerfully numb.. hehe.. i mean they were so drained of hope... and very discouraging... but i reli enjoyed reading it coz im starting to thik that way...
    gr8 job with this poem
    keep going
    take care
    NannO

    p.s. thnx 4 ur comment

  • 18 years ago

    by Vegetable

    Great job. It's refreshing to see that suicide was implied, unlike every other poem were it's bluntly discribled. Awesome.

  • 18 years ago

    by RZRBLADE

    This poem seems to show how people can thinkk they are worthless, which makes me want to make a difference in the World
    A good insight, I believe, into depression
    Well done

  • 18 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    I really don't know what to say. It is a great poem, I know that much. I love how you write what you feel and you don't make all of it up. That is a great thing.

    This poem has great flow and a great structure. Keep the awesome work up :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Psychotic Heart

    Awesome. I love it

  • 18 years ago

    by Emily

    **FIREWORKS** WHAT A GREAT POEM!! The ending was completely spectacular! I loved it!

  • 18 years ago

    by Cherri

    Very well written, I could actually picture this in my head quite vividly ^_^ great work hun...

    -*-Cherri-*-

    ps: thank you for the friendly critisim, i take it alright.

  • 18 years ago

    by Mark

    I feel this way myself at times.. it's depressing. A good job you did writing it.. short but meaningful.

    And, for the record.. a pop-tart is like 2 bits of chocolate biscuit with some chocolate syrup type thing in the inside. Very nice but not stocking them where I live anymore :(

  • 18 years ago

    by Lexi

    Omfg you have no idia how much i love this poem if i could rate higher than 5 i would!!

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Really great, definatly favorite of yours.. just one thing though... should
    "Though both highs and low"
    be
    "THROUGH both highs and lows"

    ?????

    either way, great work, keep it up!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by ShaunaMarie

    I like it!! lol, hi. take care and keep writing.. bye bye

  • 18 years ago

    by Stabbylou

    Fantastic poem, a great read. It'sdeep and moving, it really describes apathy, the feeling that you're fading away. Structured well and flows throughout. Perfect poem, keep writing 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Grrr, I like this so much I turned off my music.

    It was an excellent, sad poem.
    Short and steady.
    I really enjoyed it..You showed a great amount of emotion in such a few words.x

  • 18 years ago

    by nikki

    I can seriously relate to this poem its awesome i luv it great job!! 5/5!!

  • 18 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    I know what it feels like to think no one will care, no one will bother. You wrote it down nicely. 5/5

    Mallori