Beautifully done. Introspective and touching.

Wow! Wonderfully written... Your words are impressively chosen and the rhyme is magical. Very enjoyable read!

LAURA! WOW!!! Oh my goodness I have never read anything quite like this! Your choice of words was outstanding in this piece which is why I liked it so much because the rhymes are different and after reading like the same rhymes over and over its so nice to have a change! I loved this write Laur keep it up!
Chels

Intriguing piece! I really enjoyed reading this, it's quite thought provoking. Especially the next to last stanza, very nice.
Take care and keep it up~Holly

So sad and powerful!
"Nightmares ravened by thoughts
of all the world's impurities
Substantiated night by night
while I am lost in my insecurities"
^^^ I love this stanza, awesome work!

A very intelligent and profound poem. You have taken much care over this and it has had astaounding results.

I liked:

"Sleep is the exploitation of true feelings
and the most vulnerable of emotions"

A unique topic to write about and you approach it with vigour yet sensitivity. It worked so well I didnt notice the clever rhyme embedded in it. Nicely done....

[lostlaureate - come find me]

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Wow this is such an original poem... I've never read such a poem
"In the throes of a deep sleep
where I have no chance of escape"
Very true..thats what scarses me about dreams...and the fact they are so real
I just thought it explored the dark side of sleep...the uncontollable...and frightening side
It's strange how you wake up and your dreams make sense to what you were thinking about
Amazing...just amazing

Your poem= completely amazing

Amazing!! You described everything beautifully...wonderful job!

Such a true and real poem. I was just thinking about sleep, and I never can control those thoughts when I'm totally helpless...Great job, 5/5

I'm blown away. I really like the way you finished this one off. As if there were something to come thereafter, and we are left hanging and the words we aren't given. What are those very implications. Makes you think a little. Very nice. I look forward to reading more. Welcome to my favorites.

I would have to say everything is from the state of anyones mind really. I mean it's your mind that makes you think of stuff and then our minds for wondering what's going on. It's a crazy world out there and there's so much people seeing so many things, this poem is just one of those things that you can see and we can't. Or you can feel but we can't touch you know.

i think you did an amazing job on this poem, i really enjoyed reading it. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever. Oooh! by the way thank you for the comments means alot to me.

Fantastic, brilliant, wonderfull! So beautifully written. I'm impressed!

Excellent write!

Lotsaaaaaa love
-xxx-

This was a beautiful poem. I liked the concept of it. Keep up the good work. You are really talented. 5/5

Good write.
I liked how you explored many areas of the unconsious mind, from dreams to nightmares.
Your rhymes were constant throughout aiding the flow.
One thing that bothers me is the syllable count on the first line is 5 and on the very last line it is 13, now that's a big difference. You probably weren't writing this with syllable count in mind, but a huge gap like that affects the flow of the overall poem.
Try to keep the count more or less the same to achieve a constant structured flow.

Your use of diction was impressive and the use of more creative words made the poem just that bit better.

Good job, keep writing.

Wow!! This poem absolutely blew my away! It was so very well written & very deep & emotional. It also flowed very well. I love the meaning behind it...It is so true. This is really good. You are very talented. great job! 5/5*

Oh, WOW!! Laura!!! You dug deep and came out with one of the best poems I have EVER read. Simply amazing, Laura!

So poignent, so powerful...I really loved this poem. The use of rhyme gave it really great flow and the language sutied the feeling wonderfully. Introspective and obviously well considered. 5/5 x

WOW.. this is such a great poem.. you show SO much emotion!! And you had a amazing use of words.. Simply wonderful 5/5

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