Loved it, nice write.

-Taylor

Hey darl a t0uching write hear. l0t 0f em0ti0n in this piece. i like the way uve written it. keep it up h0pe ur d0in 0rite. =]

l0ve fr0m
d0ra

Wow...amazing...beautifuly writen...great flow....amazing work...I loved it
Emma 5/5

Wow your last name is my name lol sorry ahd to say that and also you have alot of talent flow is great content is perfect and its just a really good poem all up nice work

XoX *~CrImSon__TeArS~*

Really good rhyme sceme :) I'm sure plenty of people can relate to this
Maybe think of some imagery to place in a poem like this next time
Great stuff

One of my fave poems, so very well expressed and I loved how it ended. I am so sorry that you have to feel like this hunni and I must honestly say that I think about you alot, how you are and what you are doing ect. I hope that you are okay?? You know I am here for you, always, you just email me any time you need some one to talk with sweety....My shoulders are for you to cry on =0)

Love you sweet Angel

Maybe try to limit each time you say thinking. Try every other paragraph maybe unless you think his way is better. The final stanza held the most power as it tied it together was different (didn't have thinking) and was unique to the poem. It did have a lot of emotion, didn't feel forced, and always remeber tomorow's a better day.

Such a sad and revealing poem. The word thinking had the cumulative effect of how the thought were flowing and this lead well into each stanza. The ending was really good. "Prayer" is a powerful thing...I hope all is well. Nice poem..

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I really loved this one. The rhyme and structure work really well to keep the rhythm nice and constant and calm giving it a really meloncholy edge. The last stanza is my favourite "But as I turn out the lights,
Head on the pillow where I lay,
I secretly just start praying,
that tomorrow's a better day" still sad but gilded with a kind of sorrowful hope. Great write. 5/5 x