I liked it......

Woh! This was abeautiful poem! I can totally relate to it! And when you said "Every time I cried
No one even cared
Every time I fell
No one was there"
I really loved that part! Great work! Keep em comin! ^_^

Wow..I can totally relate to this one. I know what you mean. I have been there and done that. Stay strong.

I like this one, its deep

Wow, that is a touching poem.. I see a lot of togetherness in your poem like you dont end a stanza with one topic and begin with another you went all through your poem on topic great job 5/5

-Rachel

Wow wat a great idea for a pome i love it its really quite a peice of work ...awesum work keep it up

Great poem, in the last line did you mean 'Whom you have broken'? I stopped for a second and had to go, 'uh?'. This topic reminds me of a picture I saw, as a lot of poems tend to do. The fact it's all one stanza threw me off at the begining, but once I started reading it I forgot. Short and sweet with an effect on the reader, nice job kid.

I wonder why I hadn't clicked on your name earlier and read another of your poems.

That was an awesome poem w/ a very creative plot, i have a poem talking about a paper doll u should check it out, it reminds me of urs alot....grrt job, thx for ur comments,
love ya lots,
sore

Nice poem, full of emotion. A couple parts were dull. But you had your strong points like

Every time I cried
No one even cared
Every time I fell
No one was there

Very nice flow, best part of the poem I think. 5/5

Ummm lets see I like the poem just a few things. You switch tenses a little bit, and some words arent really neccessary like 'As if I was a doll
And I was wondering' you dont really need the and there. Ummm and the last line! 'Who you have broken' would probably fit better. But otherwise a good write.

Another good piece. well worded. No favorite bits I'm afraid.

Brad

P.S. No I'm not with that girl anymore, we broke up life a week or so after I wrote that piece, lol.