Wow that was really good, and filled w/ so much emotion. Very good.
Brooke

Wow, now this was very intense...I didn't totally understand it. But it voiced some feelings I have experienced before. Very well written each stanza lead onto the next seamlessly.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Wow, now this was very intense...I didn't totally understand it. But it voiced some feelings I have experienced before. Very well written each stanza lead onto the next seamlessly.

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Oh thats so sad and deep but I can relate to this poem. it's exactly how I feel and it is a beautifully written piece of writing and you are very talented. I like your style and choice of words :)

Wow. Surprising end. Name fits well.

xxx

I loved your chose of word and the alliteration I feel the pain in that poem. Great job.

And I can't walk away from it
The force has me inside the chain
The one forever bearing,
Portraying-impelling all the pain

^^ I loved your wording in that stanza it was very powerful definatly my favorite part

God, I was never fit for that position
You created a monster; a mistake
^^ Hun God doesn't make mistakes you by far are NOT a mistake! AT ALL! because you may be going through things does not make you a monster..if your a monster because of that...guess everyone else is too!

I really liked this poem you expressed yourself very well and do keep it up!
GOd Bless and have a good day!
Chels

Great ppoem
def 5/5
luv ya mel

Great ppoem
def 5/5
luv ya mel

Great ppoem
def 5/5
luv ya mel