The beginning was very nice! But then I kinda got lost in the end. Well actually were it talks about Dil.Sorry for not getting that part... but the flow was still pretty great!
-cheers- ^_^

There is nothing wrong with posting old poems, i do it too
this one was ok, i liked the begining much more then the end, it seemed like you suddenly wanted to stop the poem, even though there could have been more, which might have made it make more sense