Very emotionally packed and ver deep.
The ending was superb and really brought the whole thing together.
My other favorite stanza is :
And that perfect hue of gray
that rolls off every syllable
with such honesty
paralyzes my intentions
and forces me to listen...
I really made a connection with you as the author of this poem as I can relate to the words you have written.
Fantastic write.

OMG...This rocks!! I don't even know where to begin!

"I'm suffocating
in your colorful world
of heartbreaking imagery,"

I love those lines...such vivid imagery and an interesting perspective.

Then there's this part:

"And that perfect hue of gray
that rolls off every syllable"

Wow! Well done my friend!
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Well, some people try and try, and some are just born with it.. You are one of these gifted people who seem to make every word count, and leave me wanting more. You are amazing. I love this poem too. xx

Melissa, the words you choose were poignant, the imagery was superb and the flow was impecable. Wonderful write.

Warmest regards,

Steve

I'll have to copy Seyella's "it took my breath away" to put my awe into words. Amazing, wonderful, extraordinary.

I'll have to copy Seyella's "it took my breath away" to put my awe into words. Amazing, wonderful, extraordinary.

Wow I'm totally amazed at your work. Your words flow effortlessly and they are vivid and full of emotion. Excellent write :)

That was very good! i loovedd the last stanza! it was brilliant.. wow.. your an amazing poet, just keep it up!

Really deep i like alot! It's awesome!

I'm suffocating
in your colorful world
of heartbreaking imagery,
but I bow
at the exquisite details
that leave a trail
to your lovely broken heart...

This stanza is just on point. I need no say too much or I will ruin the moment.

I'm hooked by the belly
in your breathtaking scenery
of unusual wordplay
and I cannot breathe,
so if your voice
is not meant to kill
then I'm dying
for no reason at all...

Well written. Choice of words is really great. This should have won. I will give it a try.