Lol awesome poem nice job, but wat a crazy subject, evil ice cream man lol
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mia

Hats off to you icecream man for this chilling yet thrilling wirte! Yet another unique write straight from you! Your flow was kind of rocky.... Maybe you could have somone read your poem out loud and take note to where their voice goes kind of funny or they stutter.... It'll let you know exactly where your loosing it! I hope this helps because it always helps me when I hand a poem to a friend, not only do i know where to change my flow but they can also sugest some nice changes that you've never even thought of! Still this is a wonderful peice and truly deserves more than a 5/5 You hit it WAY out of the ball park with this one!

Lol nice poem, very random thats 4 sure!

I love the twist in the tale. I liked the way yoiu draw in the reader with the ice cream fable which really adds to the imagery.
Wonderfully masterful piece.

This is cute
made me laugh
*Dezseree*