This poem was pretty okay. The images were there and so was the feeling. It feels like someone desperate but playing everything safe but I could be wrong.

Wow richard, this poem holds a lot of emotions and thoughts in itself. the skin of the poem is good and so is the flesh of it.
I really loved it especially that part you say:
It's the little things that matter.

and also this part:
Melt my insecurity,
make me feel alive again.
Control me, console me,
save me from myself.

wow...just WOW.
take care,
marjan

I read this poem many times and it's pretty darn good! This poem could be made into an EXCELLENT song, just think about doing that ;) Anyways perfectly done you have me wanting to read more of your work!

I love poems that display inner reflections, probably because I find them so hard to write.
Anyway, you did a wonderful job describing each feeling. This poem caught my attention from the beginning and kept it throughout. It also has a very nice flow.
Take care and keep it up~Holly
Oh and welcome to the club :)

This was awesome. Not too short and not too long. An awesome write. Really could relate to it. Keep it up 5/5

`taleee xx

This poem was awesome!! It was filled with a lot of emotion!! I couldnt change a thing!! Brilliant write!! 5/5!!

Wow- I liked this. It had a very jarred and discordant feel which added such passion to the words. I like the way ideas about melting and the iceberg were linked. You always use such orginal ideas in your poetry that keeps it interesting. Could even be a song?

[lost_laureate]

Reli sad and kinda beseeching.. i liked the flow even tho there wasnt a consistent rhyme scheme.. gr8 job with the imagery and the wording.. powerfully built..
keep up the good work
thnx 4 the comment
take care
NannO

I loved it. Aswell as your other poems the flow and rythym of it was perfect. Least in my oppinion.

I can see where you were getting at. Great Write.

Great poem.. I just read a few of your others too and I really like em.. :)