The green-eyed monster

This is a nice poem! somehow i felt it was put in the wrong category! anyway it was amazing!

Great poem It was almost funny!(no offense if it was not suppose to be funny) It flowed great and it was different. Totally loved it!

Please r/r/c new me, rose colored glasses,
love,
who are you,
and here i am!!!

-thanks-ann

And over the all years
On my jealousy it's grown
Until it envelopes me totally
No movement is my own

It's the green- eyed monster
Who greets her everyday
But inside is roaring
Wanting to make her pay

And blinded by such jealousy
It was not me who shot your girl
It was the green-eyed monster
Seeing only a hate-red whirl

And it was the green-eyed monster
Would did all that you see
It was the green-eyed monster
Why are you blaming me?

All of these lines are pretty nonsensical. The lack of identification toward the "He" and "She" and "You"'s makes the whole poem pointless. As the reader, I feel no connection to these people who have no name.

And, lastly, the whole poem was one huge cliche. The "Green-eyed Monster" concept is totally drawn out and leaves little originality to be played with.

I like the concept...the person who is gone totally insane, enveloped by rage all because of love. The desire, the need to protect such a love is something that I'm sure many have experienced. You did a good job conjuring up this list of stories, these blind acts of love.

The only problem I have is that the last stanza seems to be worded awkwardly...try and fix that.

I don't know what to say...the poem is WAY too awesome for words to express!! I absolutely loved it!! You're an awesome writer and don't stop! Hopefully one day I can write a poem HALF as great as that!!