Wow.
is this true?
im here if it is....
=)
love you
~Emma

Wow.. i love it.. it was dripping with sadness and despair.. i loved the title, too.. i loved the way u talked about members of ur family and then explained wat was "too much" for them.. and also how u ended ur poem with a stanza about urself.. ur rhyme was perfect and i loved ur topic..
keep it up
thnx 4 the comment
take care
NannO

5/5
love you

I absolutely love love this poem. I thought it was diffrent, and unique and creative all in one, the flow and rythym and the repeating of things was exalently done, I have to say this one is my favorite out of all of the ones I've read. I really really loved it. Great Job.

Oh my gosh! So sad but yet a very great write! You're a great writer, keep up the good work! 5/5

-Stephanie-

This poem was so sad, I hope its not based on true experience! If so I give you hugs and smiles ^_^
I liked the repetition but I thought that if you did all you're "too much" stanza like the grandpa one it would be more gripping. As in do
"Too ____ to _____
Too ______ to ___
Too ____ to ___
But not too _____ to ___"
I don't know if that amde any sense haha, but its just a suggestion. Wonderful poem!

I loved how you wrote this poem! How you explained how everything was too much for everyone. It was so sad. I hope this isn't true. It flowed well. The rhymes were good. Great poem!

This was a pretty good poem.

It's really hard when people have to depend on you, but it also makes you stronger as an individual. It always seem like you're doing all the work, and I'm sure everyone else in the family feels that way, but in different situations. Like, your mom cleaning the house, your dad working.. etc (those are just examples) Everyone always thinks they have the most work. So I see the motive to writing this one. It was good, keep on writing.

My body feels so heavy
My mind won't seem to go
Something is wrong with me
But what I'm too tired to know

More nonsense...

Ugh, you have tried to make an impression with the repetition, but, try as you might, it did not come off well at all. It was a hassle to the eyes and mind to read and did not make any substantial mark on this poem.

Get some backbone. Do not listen to all of the other comments, saying that this poem is wonderful, full of sadness, and a great write. This poem fails to make any impact on me and is not a good write. Maybe friendly people are afraid to be frank in their comments, maybe they just do not want to hurt your feelings. Whatever the case, do not believe their sugar-coated lies.

WOW!!! i loved this one..You really are very talented you know how to express your feelings very well and it shows tons of emotions! great great job

Wow this poem is so sad! but very nice i loved it