EXCELLENT LISB!!! LOVE YA!!! keep writing.,. and no i dont have talent.. w.e ok yea good job.. BYE

Don\\\'t say that about ur self vick!!!...u have a lot of talent!....ur poems sound soo different from what u act and thats where ur true feelings step out of the shadow u\\\'v hidden them in...let em all step out onto that peice of paper you hold in your arms..let ur hand guide ur pen, and let ur heart guide ur hand...as long as u do that...ur poems will always be exactly what they should be..hidden feelings that u silently release...and i think this goes for anyone...keep writting vick:):)

Ooo! Very nice poem! Loved it! Lol.

[So just stop pretending to know what it's like,
Cause unless you actually do,
Take all your lies and go for a hike.
You have no idea, what I'm going through!!]

That's exactly how I felt when I dumped my (ex) bf and he said everything was ok and fine and we would get through it. Ya, that's what he thought. I loved the flow and how well you expressed your anger throughout this entire poem. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

*No words seem to escape her widely opened mouth; a blank stare on her face.* Wow...That's intense I loved it!

Well hey, I liked it anyways.. And I'm not really sure what else to say about... Sorry. =(

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I like it. There is so much anger in pain in it I can really understand how you feel. Just a couple of things...
I think it should be in the explicit/profanity section because of the swearing. And the line
"Or you won't be able to sit" just doesn't seem to fit in... The rhyme seems forced there.
Good poem though, I like it! 5/5
- Polly

I think this poem has better potential..........I myself have tried to get these words out in a poem but have failed, now I think that you have gotten a lot farther then me but I think it could be a bit better........better flow and structure.

-AnnMarie

Love it love it love it!

Well in this poem you did sound pissed off! and well to me... using "s h i t" or "f u c k i n", never makes a poem nice, but in ur poem it flowed together with the whole poem! cos you did put them in the right place

Keep it up!