Please tell me whats wrong!

by holly   May 25, 2006


I don't know what to do
cause you will not let me help
how can i make you happy if you wont say what is wrong?

It hurts me so much to see you in pain,
wheres that crazy smile,
that brightens up my day?
wheres you dominating laugh?
and those stupid comments that you always HAVE to make!
as annoying as they are
they've become a part of me.
so having you like this,
its tearing me apart!

I want to talk to you but i don't know where to start.
It hurts me when you cannot smile,
and theres nothing i can do!
I feel so helpless! please tell me whats wrong.
don't shut out the world,
your making it worse.
and don't shut out your friends,
you cant imagine how much that hurts

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "wheres you dominating laugh?"
    'your' not 'you'
    ~~~
    My favorite stanza was the second, since it displayed so much attention to real life details about the person being spoken to.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I really liked your poem, it tells what friendship is about. I loved the second stanza, it was very detailed and original.

    Great job! 5/5