Comments : Blustery Day

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    I especially love this stanza:

    "And though with nightfall
    reality will bring us down,
    another day will come;
    the kite will again fly around"

    I can relate. This is a very beautiful poem. Truly refreshing. It's not often that I read a poem about kites, flying kites, etc. Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    Sorry the return comment has taken so long.

    This poem is written perfectly, and the structure compliments the poem very well. In my opinion, the last line seems slightly wrong as I had to read it several times to try to get it to fit. It feels a bit too long, however this is a minor thing and it may just be me that thinks this. FAntastic poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Becky

    Tis poem sounds so lovely, sounds just like sometihng from a wonderful dream, something so amazing it could only be real in a ream. amazing poem.

    lots of love
    *~*Becky*~*

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Excellent use of imagery. I had a good picture the whole time I read it. It wasn't too long or short, and it ended perfectly with just the right words. I don't know how you do it so well, but keep it up. xxx 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Very rarely does anyone write something fun and light-hearted anymore, and usually they get criticized that light-hearted stuff isn't as deep and meaningful. I don't think that's necessarily the case at all and I think this is a good example of that.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Is This a Song? Because when i read it it seems like a song to me. Which makes me like it even more. .There's nothing bad i can say.. its flawless...

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Hey i wasnt done.. and it did it twice.. how annoying. we should be able to delete comments.. anyways

    the only thing that could make it better was if you added a tune, beat and melody, recorded it and put it on myspace.. lol.

    \5|5/ for sure..

    xLaurenx

  • 17 years ago

    by lexie

    Beautiful work.
    i love the idea of kite.
    especially the repitition of "like a kite,like a kite"
    wonderful.
    -lexie

  • 16 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    Time to be free and fly on that day
    where the turbulence in the world
    will let us climb away...

    seems a bit choppy and forced, but the whole first stanza took my breath away.

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very creative poem with good use of metaphors and the analogies are well fitted in the poem. Overall a cohesive and great poem. tc

  • 16 years ago

    by Danielle

    Hey, great work.
    I can definately relate to this.
    I've read most of your poems and their all wonderful.
    :)