Wow..that's so true. I really liked this one.

"So slid on that short skirt"
Slid should be slide.

"Make sure your centre of attention"
Centre should be center.

Just a couple of little mistakes. Good job!

Another awesome poem, Sarah. I loved it
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Lol this poem has a great message and, as sad as it is, it made me laugh. I spose it's because it's so true. Great job.

Nice way to get the point across. I really liked it. Though it made me sad. One of my friends killed herself while high. Great poem.

Ravyn

Really good you have a bold point to make and you didn't without losing rythym i know quite a few people who have had stuff similar not quite as severe happen and your first lines describing what they do to get ready reminded me of how they felt.

You seem to have overdosed
To much drugs in your system
Now everyone has their eyes on you

^however "To much drugs" should be "TOO much drugs" amazing how people picked up on the supposedly "wrong" spelling of Centre but not a little word like TO

also it seemed to drag on a little long around the mention of weed maybe a little too much detail